caged bird
caged bird don't be afraid, you just have to fly
fly into the big blue sky
Caged bird, don't look away
To what's in front of you,
IT's only there for a few
Every time you escape, you fly back to the same place
back into your cage
searching for another day, while this one fades away
you're ground must break
Every time you dream a dream
you think of the world being a different thing
while your lonely wings cry for adventure
so adventure to the deepest of deep
and let your cage swing
You meet a broken love bird on the way
don't be selfish, don't let him fade
Go to the places that he calls home
and you'll see that life has really become whole
free bird, soaring high, fly fly fly
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James Porterfield
This is a good lyric. A decent structure, but I would love to see it with a bridge or "middle 8" lyric in there that took it out of the rhythmic structure of the main verse/chorus. Though, with music it could be structured as a folk song with an instrumental break possibly. I am not sure what sort of music you are imaginine to go along with it. Has anyone attempted to compose music to it?
The only issue I have would be:
The line, "You're ground must break." does not seem to follow the ryming scheme or the rhythmic structure. Also not sure how "ground breaking" works as an image about a flying bird or caged bird.
But please always take my thoughts with a grain of salt! As they always said in Iowa Writer's Workshop, "every writer at this table can only tell you how they would have written it. Only you can write it your way." 8 years ago
The only issue I have would be:
The line, "You're ground must break." does not seem to follow the ryming scheme or the rhythmic structure. Also not sure how "ground breaking" works as an image about a flying bird or caged bird.
But please always take my thoughts with a grain of salt! As they always said in Iowa Writer's Workshop, "every writer at this table can only tell you how they would have written it. Only you can write it your way." 8 years ago
