Sounds like there's something to build on there. I'm new to the site but could I suggest some lyric amendments/additions. Hope I'm following the proper protocol. Here they are: If one life is all we have, Let me spend my days with you You add color to my canvas Every day a different hue. You brighten up my memories through images of you. It’s a canvas framed in love You make each day new. If one life is all we have, Let your touch entwine with mine We’ll keep turning pages as our lives merge...

I'm a bit of a newbie but would provide a lyric critique. I'm working on several song lyrics that definitely will need a critique. I'm just getting used to the forum.

I would don't in a lot of place where doesn't is used. For example : "Don't sleep like he used to", They don't understand his pain.

I'm a bit of a newbie to the site, but I like the song and message.